I want to be like water.
Water has a quiet power, an ever-realized presence, a sound with no force, an ability to move and be solid.
If I could be water I would slide through your cracks, inhibit your crevices and then become solid within them.
I would vaporize so that you could breathe me in and taste my smoke.
But
I can’t manipulate water; I am not graceful or flowing.
I am made of flesh and bone that refuses to adapt, refuses to recreate itself.
No matter how much I want it to.
No matter how much I want to become everything that you are.
This stubborn flesh hides my thoughts behind watery eyes, my tongue forbids my speech and again
I wish I were water.
That my words spilled out.
Truth be told I would love to witness their birth, these words.
For I myself don’t know their final form.
Sometimes I feel as though their sheer utterance may keep me from bursting.
I wonder if there is something wrong with me, possible glaring abnormalities, differences that I should be paying attention to.
We.
The two of us.
we are a puzzle with half the pieces missing, as if we took them and shook them and dumped them in the river and now have decided to scour the world in search of their remnants.
They would have been warped by the river, and even if by some miracle we came upon them.
They would not be the things they once were.
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Really nice poem – I think this is an awesome premise. If you don’t mind a suggestion, I’d single space and lose all those periods! Nice work, though – you’re a talented writer.
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Wow great
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Raw emotions… So beautiful!
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Beautiful poem.
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So beautiful
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Beautiful writing after such a long time. Mesmerising.
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thank you :) glad you stumbled upon my little corner of the interwebs.
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Love your thoughts. ❤️
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thank you!
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I really connected with this poem! You are a very skilled and passionate writer, keep up the great work! :)
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thank you!
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This is beautiful!
It reminds me of a question my friend asked the other day. She said ‘if you could bend any element what would it be’ and I said water with no hesitation. There’s something so magical about it.
Lovely post Xx
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thank you :)
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No problem 💛
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Beautiful poetry–love the comparison of self to water!
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Me too!
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This is beautiful. Absolutely beautiful. The writing style reminds me of the poem I wrote today for Earth Day: She Smiles; poem in recognition of Earth Day
https://peculiarcircle.wordpress.com/2017/04/22/she-smiles-my-poem-in-recognition-of-earth-day/
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Love this!
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nice one here!
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This is just wonderful..
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thanks so much for sharing!
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Amazing words, I can 100% relate to this.
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thanks for sharing!
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you’re welcome, I really enjoyed readi
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you’re welcome, I really enjoyed reading it.
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Wow .. amazing
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Oh my god, how I can relate to this. I have always wanted to be like water. Amazing read and perspective. Give my blog a read fellow bloggers? Sorry I am new to the community. :)
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This is so good. So moving and clear, yet there’s a hint of mystery. I think you successfully spill words out really well, but probably not the ones you intended.
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this is true
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Beautifully written!
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I love this it’s beautiful!
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really nice
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Love it!
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this is so strong!! keep going
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Beautiful 🤗
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