I want to be like water.
Water has a quiet power, an ever-realized presence, a sound with no force, an ability to move and be solid.
If I could be water I would slide through your cracks, inhibit your crevices and then become solid within them.
I would vaporize so that you could breathe me in and taste my smoke.
But
I can’t manipulate water; I am not graceful or flowing.
I am made of flesh and bone that refuses to adapt, refuses to recreate itself.
No matter how much I want it to.
No matter how much I want to become everything that you are.
This stubborn flesh hides my thoughts behind watery eyes, my tongue forbids my speech and again
I wish I were water.
That my words spilled out.
Truth be told I would love to witness their birth, these words.
For I myself don’t know their final form.
Sometimes I feel as though their sheer utterance may keep me from bursting.
I wonder if there is something wrong with me, possible glaring abnormalities, differences that I should be paying attention to.
We.
The two of us.
we are a puzzle with half the pieces missing, as if we took them and shook them and dumped them in the river and now have decided to scour the world in search of their remnants.
They would have been warped by the river, and even if by some miracle we came upon them.
They would not be the things they once were.
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Nice😊
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Very amazing words
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Congrats on having your poem on discover.
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Powerful stuff…
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Hi, your poetry seems very natural and from the heart. I am also a writer and poet who write from the heart. You can check my work too on http://www.saintmonk.com.
I am following you for my future writings.
Thanks and follow me back if possible.
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You have written the feelings so effortlessly and brought out the feelings of one’s obsession about another and the craving to possess all of it. Reblogged it in vinrama.wordpress.com hope you don’t mind :) thanks
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Reblogged this on Scorpio Soul Search and commented:
“No matter how much I want to become everything that you are”
This poem by Miri Elm in ‘A Short conversation’ captures the essence of possessiveness and how much obsession to hold everything of the other person is desired, to an extent that can be considered crazy. Read and you will know
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Lovely poem 🙂
Captivatiing from beginning to end…and so relatable…
I’d never thought of water this way….yet I felt it every step of the way. Wow.
Interesting!
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This is a beautiful poem! I love the second stanza, “If I could be water I would slide through your cracks, inhibit your crevices and then become solid within them.” We all have a need to be loved completely and wholly and consume others minds and hearts fully. It’s just as important to experience being filled this way by another person. It’s a part of living and experiencing life to its fullest in its greatest joy.
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Thanks Theresa,
Interestingly enough I looked at this more from an “obsession” angle rather than a true romantic love. But I always find it so cool to see how different people’s interpretations are from what I thought of when I wrote it, it’s the best part. :)
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https://justjacks.wordpress.com/2017/04/07/song-lyrics-note-to-self/
Hey guys. I’m trying to follow my dream here as I’m sure most of you are. So if you have a moment please take some time to read this and give me some feedback :). It would mean a lot to a little guy like me in a big pond
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This is amazing !
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Incredibly beautiful and powerful imagery. You are so talented! I honestly aspire to this level of poetic talent :)
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Very well done.
I especially liked the part about breathing in the smoke.
Great pacing.
Very visceral :)
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Lovely! I wish I was water.
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Never stop expressing yourself, it’s vital to a healthy emotional, mental, and spiritual self. Plus you do a wonderful job doing so. It’s very inspiring for others like myself 🍉
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Nice. ❤️
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Actually, we are like water. We don’t have form, reasons; you see yourself different from how anybody sees you and which is different from how another person sees you. We are dynamic and I love it.
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Reblogged this on By the Mighty Mumford and commented:
METAPHYSICALLY MESMERIZING!
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“I wish I were water.
That my words spilled out.”
Such lovely words, I could only wish I had written them :D
I rarely follow blogs on WordPress, but your writing is just amazing. <3
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thank you!
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Beautiful. ☺️
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So beautiful!
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Reblogged this on Norman Vincent.
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I like to be water after reading this and then I can be what I want and flow where I want to. Creative piece of writing. Thanks for sharing it.
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Lol! Great though
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Beautiful 😍
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Lovely
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And the rough grace of a brook as well…
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Hi. I loved your style of writing. Your writing is actually like water. You blended your expressions so beautifully with the element. Your emotions flowed like water. It had the pain of a teardrop and the chill of ice too. Would love to read more. 😊
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thank you! I’ve got about 100 posts on here so there’s plenty more to read :)
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This was so extremely beautiful
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Beautiful! Felt the emotion!
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Reblogged this on IZNI ARIFAH SHUIB ©.
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thanks for sharing!
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Beautiful
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Water, Water and Water. It’s fact of everyone life.
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Whenever I read something like this.. It reminds me of what a shitty writer I am.
This is amazing.. :)
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the only truly shitty writers are the ones who don’t do it ;)
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Nice thinking.Your posts are relatable 😊
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Beautiful.
Just beautiful.
Bravo.
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जल ही जीवन है,और हमे जिन्दा रहने के लिए इसे बचाना हमारा कर्तब्य है,
water is life, if should live life then save to water
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Absolutely stunning!!! I had goosebumps while reading it!
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INDEED IT’S A GREAT READ. I NEVER REALLY HAD MUCH TIME FOR POETRY, BUT THIS ONE CAPTURED MY ATTENTION. PLUS I REALLY LOVE THE PICTURE; EXCELLENT CHOICE.
GOD BLESS YOU
(angel)(angel)(angel)(angel)(angel)
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Awesome! I’m sure Bruce Lee said something about being like water or something among them lines. 👍
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Magnificent
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Beautiful thought. 😊
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I want to be water too 😂😂😂
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A thought so beautifully expressed !!!
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wow ! now I desire to be like water
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Talking about flexibility. yeah this is fabulous expression. nice to see more again.
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beautiful!!
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Great share! Brilliant mind
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After reading this..I want to be water too! Awesome post…even 1000 likes are less..hope to see more..good luck👍💖👌👌👌
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Reblogged this on celestialk1 and commented:
After reading this, I question why we aren’t water (although our body is made up of lots of water)… I share the same poetic views, and I would love to be like water, too. <3
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